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You (yes, you!) and me are going to write a song together.
Here's how it works folks:
a whole bunch of us collaborate together on a lyric. Once everyone is happy with its final form they all go away and make their own songs out of it - just to see how different people interpret this same lyric. No one releases until everyone is finished or has thrown in the towel (to avoid people unconsciously copying one another - which would rather defeat the object).
No fixed time limits - it takes as long as it takes.
Topic - I can't write to a topic so I suggest we start off fairly randomly and add, subtract, multiply and divide as we go along.
Oh yes - you're first!
(Acknowlegements: this is based on an idea that ShowGram came up with called Poetica Melt. All the credit for cleverness should go to him and all accusations of vulgarising and watering down should be directed to yours truly. Thank you.) |
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May 25, 2005 | 8:25 pm |
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Ok...I'll bite.
Topics... hmmm. Interesting.
How about Post Nuclear War?
Or an apocalyptic world?
Now, start the flood of topics.  |
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May 25, 2005 | 9:22 pm |
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I was thinking more along the lines of just throwing some lyrics into the air and seeing what topic comes out of it, rather than the other way round... although you've got some flipping good lines there -
How about a post nuclear war
Or an apocalyptic world?
Now start the flood... |
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May 25, 2005 | 9:49 pm |
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No worries. How about a starter line to get things going then...totally disassociated with the topics I previously posted.
"Forever waiting through an eternity of endless nights; without sleep.
Waiting for the single dream that will once again bring us together.
As the silky night closes about me, I feel alone, except for my thoughts of you."
Any takers? |
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May 25, 2005 | 10:15 pm |
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"Thoughts of you ever formost, flowing though my mind." |
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May 25, 2005 | 10:18 pm |
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"I one a skunk, I two a skunk
I three a skunk, I four a skunk
I five a skunk, I six a skunk
I seven a skunk, I eight a skunk..."
"YOU ATE A SKUNK???" |
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May 25, 2005 | 11:00 pm |
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Forever waiting through an eternity of endless nights;
it seems as if ur my only hope, my one and only light
Waiting for the single dream
Thoughts of you flowing though my mind
it seems that u are more than just human kind
a one like you is almost impossible to find
i kinda edited parts of ur lyrics, but how is it? |
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May 25, 2005 | 11:01 pm |
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You actually scare me, because the line I placed was from a poem... and you put some lines that I had written. Amazing.
Although they were not from the particular poem, they were actually from other poems that I had written during the 80's.
Forever waiting through an eternity of endless nights;
it seems as if ur my only hope, my one and only light
Waiting for the single dream
Here is the whole of the lyric that I had written in 87....
Thoughts of you ever formost flowing through my mind,
Whispy ghost-like images scattered throughout time.
As I look into your eyes and see what's come to pass,
I wonder if we did love, would it ever last. |
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May 25, 2005 | 11:15 pm |
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haha that is scary...
Forever waiting through an eternity of endless nights;
it seems as if ur my only hope, my one and only light
Waiting for the single dream
Thoughts of you flowing though my mind
it seems that u are more than just human kind
a one like you is almost impossible to find
Thoughts of you flowing through my mind,
Whispy ghost-like images scattered throughout time.
As I look into your eyes and see what's come to pass,
I wonder if we did love, would it ever last?
Cuz time goes on throughout our life,
i wonder what've happened if u had become my wife
even over all these years
love never stops
usually leads to flowin tears
but when u love u have no fears
i waited all those days for u to come back
but everyday u didn't i would cut u some slack
almost suffered from lover's attack
but you moved on and u never came back
....i dunno.... what ya think?
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May 26, 2005 | 12:08 am |
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Take what was and make it less... I have no idea how this would work with rythym, but i imagine Bjork could pull it off.
Waiting. Wanting eternal night; endless
Hope only in one light low
Waiting. Single dream dawn; endless
Thought flow mind mow
It seems human
A one almost possible
Whisp ghost close
Scattered into your eyes
And see
Wonder if we
Time goes our life,
Happen had become, love never stops
Leads to flow tears
When you have no fears
Waited days
Back slack suffer
but you moved on |
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May 26, 2005 | 6:33 am |
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Hmmm... don't know what you're going to think of this, but here goes: I took the three versions and randomly sucked out words and phrases and turned them into a completely different kind of song. Verse-chorus-verse-chorus-chorus is the structure I had in mind. Um, and I know that cleverly significant commas don't really work in song lyrics but both commas in here are there for a reason.
waiting for eternal light
dreams wash out into the light of day
thoughts flowing through my mind
leave me blind
almost human
waited days
perfect, stupid
wispy ghost-like images of
flowing tears: protection
fighting the infection of sight
one-eyed man pretends
never ends
almost human
wispy ghost-like images of
everyday slack
fighting back
almost, stupid
wispy ghost-like images of
perfect human
you moved on
Okay - you're next - feel free to give it a good working over! |
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May 30, 2005 | 6:17 pm |
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Sounds good to me. I will offer another verse/refrain variation, to include a few lines from the previous posts.
And to prove a point, that one can take a flippant post and turn it into a valid idea, here is my proposal for a title:
Skunk I Seven -or- Thunk I Seven
Thoughts of you flowing
Thoughts through my mind,
Scattered throughout time,
Cuz time goes on,
Love never stops |
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May 30, 2005 | 8:49 pm |
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ok changing all these lyrics is great, but don't we actually need to be moving on with this song, not altering or shortening the versions? (i'm not saying doin this is bad, but i feel like we should be adding and altering instead of altering and shortening so that we can make some progress with the song...) |
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May 31, 2005 | 5:06 am |
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When you say we need to move on with the song, GoCho, I'm not sure what you mean - I personally think that editing down is at least as important as building up (think of the bands who record twenty songs for an album and then choose the best 12). Anyway I propose some arbitrary rules to decide when the lyric writing/editing stage is over:
If you want to add, subtract or alter anything, go ahead.
If nobody posts an update for (let's say) 10 days, then we will assume that everyone is happy and that we have a final version.
If you think ten days is too short then do say so, I'm not especially attached to the number ten (although I do think that any shorter would be a little unfair). It's like an extended game of monopoly that's never going to end - we might say that whoever has the most cash at 3am is the winner, but we do have to agree on whose watch we're going to go by. Anyway if noone says otherwise we'll assume ten days for now - starting from this post. |
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Jun 06, 2005 | 7:01 am |
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Things look to me like they are starting to take shape.
I am going to cut and paste these lyrics and take a crack at them in the context of the original thought I had when I wrote the lines I initially posted and will repost something either later tonight or tomorrow.
This looks like it might be getting fun.
(edited to add)
This is my shot at some lyrics. I will try to post a quick diddy that will present the melody idea in a little bit (I gotta do it tonight before I forget what I have on my mind).
Impossible Nights
Impossible Nights;
Wanting you to rescue me.
Impossible Nights;
Hoping you will set me free.
Forever through eternity
Waiting for the single dream,
That will bring us back together
Waiting, wanting, loveís eternal light
Living life dumb and blind, in these impossible nights
Impossible Nights;
Thoughts of you are in my head
Impossible Nightsí
Leaving me behind again
It seems youíre more than human
A wispy ghost-like image
Impossible to find
Waiting, wanting, loveís eternal light
Living life dumb and blind, in these impossible nights
Impossible Nights;
When you love you have no fear
Impossible Nights;
When youíre alone thatís not so clear
Suffering through wrong loveís attack
For the single dream
That will bring us back together
Iíve suffered through the tears
Waited for the light
Iíve wondered if we did love
Would you become my wife
Wispy ghost-like images flowing through my mind
It seems youíre more than human; impossible to find
In these impossible nightsÖ |
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Jun 06, 2005 | 5:38 pm |
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